If I want to arrive safely at my destination, that is, the
end of the course, I think this blog needs to take a wildly different turn. My
destination is having shit published by the end of the semester, and I don’t
believe I’ll be publishing reading responses anytime soon. The blog word
requirement is 500, and that just so happens to be a pretty premium number for
flash fiction, so I may make it a requirement for myself to pump out flash
fiction on this baby. The pieces might relate to the text, but then again, they
may not. I’ll let the story emerge/unfold of its own volition. These things
have lives of their own. They shape me as much as I shape them. So here goes.
Flash Fiction. Let’s see if I can sustain it. (Yes I did the reading. I enjoyed
it thoroughly. Inevitably, I’ll borrow stylistically from Pirsig. This might be
imperceptible, but it’s there.)
His name is
Joe, or Ron. It depends on when you meet him. I meet him when he’s Joe and later
when he’s Ron. When I meet Joe, he’s dying from a heroin overdose at Chuck’s
place. This is common in Bullhead City.
Bullhead City
is kind of like the last place you madly needed to leave. Wherever it was,
whatever the compulsion to go, that’s Bullhead City. It’s located along the
Colorado River on the southernmost point of Lake Mojave about 90 miles south of
Vegas, just close enough for some of that sin to ride the heat waves and bleed
over into our city. A traveler may have stopped here, maybe saw a sunset
over Lake Mojave—the hues of purple, red, and orange reflecting off the lake, the
clouds dappled across the sky—but that snapshot of otherworldly beauty is an
illusion quickly dissolved in the heat of the day. The city doesn’t reside in
the landscape or the climate anyway. I’ve lived here long enough to know the
real city resides in the people.
So Joe is
passed out, maybe dead, across the street. This is what Tootsie tells me. She
stumbled lazily into my trailer after shooting up at Chuck’s, after Joe
flat-fuck falls and goes into convulsions. She plops down beside
me on my couch. “I can save him,” she says. “I save people all the time.”
“You can
save him? If you can save him, why don’t you go over there and save him?”
“Ah, it’s a
hassle, ay,” she says, sinking into the couch.
I offer her
a half gram of crystal if she’ll save him, and we walk to Chuck’s. Nobody picks
like Chuck, and he has the scab to prove it. This scab covers the entire
surface of his face where a beard should be. Greens, yellows, and reds color
the scab at varying degrees of elevation like a topographic map. I once caught
him picking at my place. He was in the bathroom tearing at the scab with duct
tape. His blood was sprayed across the walls and floor. Chuck disgust me, but I’m
drawn to the prospect of seeing a life leave or enter a body.
Chuck kneels
beside Joe, his scab-enveloped mouth pressed up against Joe’s, forcing monstrous
breaths into his lungs. Just then Joe opens his eyes to see that scab looming
over him, that flaky dying mass of flesh too close to his face. His eyes go
wide and he runs from the house without a word. Chuck smiles so big his scab
cracks.
I meet Joe
again when I’m downtown with Barry. “I gotta talk to this guy,” Barry says.
“It’s Joe,
right?” I say.
“No, it’s
Ron now,” he says, and just then Barry hits him so hard he shits his pants.
He’s out
cold. I can smell the putrid stench coming off him. Looking down on him, I know
that he’ll recover. I just wonder who he’ll be the next time I see him.
My favorite line: "Chuck smiles so big his scab cracks."
ReplyDeleteThis reminded me of Pirsig, of the obvious dual personality and of the attention to the landscape, but it also made me think of Atwood. The passage about Bullhead City is kind of like a reverse of Lucy - Lucy is in the landscape, while Bullhead City is in you.
I feel like to get the full effect of Pirsig you need more narrator commentary; and also for me it doesn't feel finished like a flash fiction piece should, but that's just my opinion......
It's sort of funny how in different moments of our lives we can seem like a completely different person; really bungles up what identity is, along with the whole "why" question.
Well. It was indeed surreal to start and finish reading this piece of writing when I was already listening to the ‘Tintin and Snowy friendship ballad’ from a heartwarming Dutch musical…
ReplyDeleteI believe I see the Pirsig influence in your piece. I don’t know how to give you feedback any more than I know what to say about Pirsig presently. (Although "greens, yellows, and reds color the scab at varying degrees of elevation like a topographic map" was an impactful bit of imagery.)
I was wondering…what caused this monstrous scab? Does it have something to do with heroin? I…actually know very little about heroin.
I wonder if you’ll start a trend with this post...that is, cause other bloggers to incorporate creative writing into responses.